Eliminating "of"s

Simplifying your writing will often make it sound more natural. You can do this by eliminating the preposition of whenever possible. For example, here are two phrases that are perfect candidates for this kind of simplification:

durability of product
process of manufacturing

There’s no good reason to use of if you can simplify by using one word as an adjective:

product durability
manufacturing process

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Eliminate unnecessary prepostions

Many times, the simplest way to write something in English is the best and most natural way of writing it. One way you can simplify is by avoiding the preposition of whenever possible. Here are some examples from your essay:

YOU WROTE: The appearance of the person
MORE NATURAL: The person’s appearance

YOU WROTE: a lot of characteristics of the person
MORE NATURAL: a lot of the person’s characteristics/traits

YOU WROTE: the status of the person
MORE NATURAL: the person’s status

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