Look at this sentence:
In fact, there are many things that stress people out, such as, work and school and cause emotional distress.
The problem is that the phrase such as is used incorrectly. Here are some rules for using it correctly:
1) Do not use a comma (,) after such as. For example, do not write: …such as, work and school… Correct is this: …such as work and school...
2) Try to place such as immediately following the noun or phrase it modifies. Incorrect: …many things that stress people out, such as work and school and cause... Correct is this: …many things, such as work and school, that stress people out and cause…
If we make the corrections above, this is what we get:
In fact, there are many things, such as work and school, that stress people out and cause emotional distress.
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