You wrote:
“products could be a burden for people”
The problem is with the word “burden”—we don’t use burden in this way. We use burden in two main ways:
1) “burden” = heavy load, especially when it makes it difficult for an animal or machine. Example: “The donkey collapsed under the burden of all the…”
2) “burden” = something that causes great difficulty, usually over a period of time. Example: “The government is burdened by its debt.”
For your sentence, I recommend the following:
“products may cause a lot of problems for the people who buy them”
You wrote:
“First, cheap products are generally fragile”
Correct is this:
“First, cheap products are easily broken.”
(“fragile“= easily broken because of the material the product is made of. For example, glass can be fragile; a table cannot be fragile.)
You wrote:
“Companies cut their costs to make cheap products as much as they can”
More natural is this:
“Companies cut their costs to make as many cheap products as they can”
However, the meaning of this sentence is not logical in the context of the paragraph. Here’s what I suggest:
“Companies cut their costs to make products as cheaply as they can”
You wrote:
“sometimes they contain dangerous ingredients or are out of order”
I wasn’t sure what you meant here. The first part of the sentence is okay, but the second part was difficult. The main thing I didn’t understand was the phrase “out of order.” “Out of order” means that some kind of automated machine for the public is broken. For example, I can say, “the bathroom is out of order” or “the ATM (bank machine for getting cash) is out of order.” Here is a suggestion:
“sometimes they contain dangerous ingredients and can be harmful to the health”
As always, I hope this has helped!
Many thanks,
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