Thanks for the essay. I liked your ideas a lot. Even so, I have to admit that this essay wasn’t as good as the one you wrote yesterday. There were a couple problems:
The first one was your choice of vocabulary words. The problem is that in terms of grammar there’s nothing really wrong; the native speaker, however, would use a different word. Here are four examples of what you wrote vs. how I would have written it:
1) “sometimes criticism brings anarchy to a society”--> “sometimes criticism causes disruption in society”
2) “it often contributes to the progress of a people” --> “it often contributes to the development of a people”
3) “criticism brings accountability” --> “criticism results in accountability”
4) “adverse work” --> “misdeeds”
The other thing you seem to have problems with is forming conditionals in English: the first conditional, second conditional, and third conditional. If you have a grammar book, I recommend spending some time studying this grammar because it is quite common in both writing and speaking. First conditional and second conditional are the most important.
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